STUDENT DETAILS
My name is Shubham Singh. I am a Student. At present I am pursuing  B.A(H) German from Amity University. I have successfully  completed  my B1 level in German. *
I have had  experience in teaching German to school and college students who had German as their secondary language. I have also been a part of German Dramatics at a smaller level. Also I have been a volunteer at an NGO  that works for the betterment of  Environment and slum children.
I believe in the quality of  Patience and calmness.  There is always my best attempt  to maintain a positive Aura around.  Also, I am a keen learner for language. I like to study vocabulary and gain new methods of speaking.
 
CAREER GOALS
*I want my Career Goals to be experience –oriented. I want to gain extinsively from my Education. To obtain a better vision of a different culture is my motive. The Understanding and sense of Interaction is my Goal.  Over all, I wish to work with inter-cultural groups and have the most out of it.  
*I wish for a career that provides me with the benefit to travel and explore. Practicing a different civilization would help me grow my communication skills. Furthermore, I intend to pursue a parallel professional skill for advancement in  language. This would help me to gain the technical aspects practiced in a different world.
* My Motive is not much Academic specific rather I would approve for Satisfaction that comes from participating  in multicultural programmes and Communication. I want to develop the methods of living in a different world and sexercise the art of Interaction.
*Greatly I would adapt myself into a business world as well and give myself an opportunity to fulfill demanding tasks with my potential in language.  I want to create a long lasting asset for myself and also for the organization I would be working for.
*I would appreciate this opportunity for internship, and will always give my best attempt through my qualities and competency in order to work in your organization.  
 
 
 
 
 
 
Here are some mistakes, which i have tried to correct from my last sample, which i had sent to the Modlingua.

Spelling Mistakes  - 6

• Secondary – Second

The word secondary doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one

• Extinsively – extensively

The word Extinsively is not correctly spelled.

• Over all – Overall

The word Over all seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

• Long Lasting – Long – lasting

It appears that long lasting is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s)

• Into – to

It appears that the preposition into may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

• An internship or the internship

The noun phrase internship seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.
Punctuation Mistakes – 2   

• Present,

It appears that you are a missing a comma after the introductory phrase At Present. Consider adding a comma.

• Also,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase Also. Consider adding a comma
Conventions mistakes - 5

• Successfully completed

It appears that you have an extra space between the words Succesfully and completed Consider removing the extra space.

• Had experience

It appears that you have an extra space between the words Had and Experience. Consider removing the extra space.

• Attempt to

It appears that you have an extra space between the words Attempt and To. Consider removing the extra space.

•  In Language

It appears that you have an extra space between the words In and Language. Consider removing the extra space.

• Participating in

It appears that you have an extra space between the words Participating and In. Consider removing the extra space.

Error Analysis 

Total No. of words - 343
Total no o/f Target Text - 343
 

• Error related to Punctuation- 2
• Error related to Spelling - 6
• Error related to conventions - 5  
• Factual Errors - 0