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MEGHA SAWHNEY
Hi! I am Megha Sawhney, a final year student of English honours in Sri Venkateswara College, Delhi University. A writer, poet, part-time translator, certified content writer, and an artist. Interned as an oral story archiver for South Asia Institute of Harvard University, and as a content writer for a fashion start-up and an Urdu campaign. I have got my cover arts, illustrations, and articles published in magazines including Kalaage Mag. I have also worked as a freelance translator for projects to be translated from Hindi to English, looking forward to a career in the same. A curious learner sincere with commitments and deadlines.
Version 2: CORRECTED VERSION
MEGHA SAWHNEY
Hi! I am Megha Sawhney, a final year student of English Honours in Sri Venkateswara College, Delhi University. A writer, poet, part-time translator, certified content writer, and an artist. I have interned before as an oral story archiver for the South Asia Institute of Harvard University, as a content writer for a fashion start-up named ‘Diachic’ and for an Urdu campaign ‘Afreen Afreen’. I have got my cover arts, illustrations, and articles published in magazines including Kalaage Mag. I have also worked as a freelance translator from language Hindi to English. I am looking forward to a career in the same. A curious learner sincere with commitments and deadlines.
Comments/ types of errors
Capitalization
Incomplete sentence, article missing.
Incomplete sentence and references, ‘And’ is repeated.
Syntax
Sentence structure, too long
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Career Goals
I am looking forward to a career in translation in Hindi to the English language. Since most people are interested in foreign languages, I thought of going back to the native one and help in sustaining its significance. I am from Rudrapur, Uttrakhand which doesn’t give me access to a lot of opportunities as compared to people from metropolitan cities, hence an inclination towards freelancing in terms of future career goals. Awaiting to grab all kinds of working opportunities coming my way.
Version 2: CORRECTED VERSION
Career Goals
I am looking forward to a career in translation from language Hindi to English. Since most people are interested in foreign languages, so I thought of going back to the native one and extend support in sustaining its significance. I am from Rudrapur, Uttrakhand which doesn’t give me access to a lot of opportunities as compared to people from metropolitan cities. Hence, I have an inclination towards freelancing in terms of future career goals. Awaiting to grab all kinds of opportunities to work coming my way.
Comments/ types of errors
Syntax.
Article ‘The’ not required.
‘From’ missing after translation
Missing conjunction
Better choice of words to be applied.
Too long sentence. Comma after hence
Sentence formation
Error Analysis
Total Number of Source Text: 186
Total Number of Target Text: 194
Errors related to articles
03
Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces, capitalization
02
Omissions
02
Spelling errors
00
Choice of words
01
Factual errors
00
Choice of words and overall consistency of those words
00
An eye for details
lack of attention to details
Page layout and overall presentation
-
Profile Photo
A little informal for a professional profile
Errors in sentence formation/ syntax:
04
Number of long sentences:
02
Incomplete sentences:
02
Time taken to correct 380 words:
20 Minutes
Time taken to prepare this evaluation report:
1 hour 30 minutes
