Drafted Version
Pursuing B.A.Hons.from GRS Department and will be joining JNU for the Masters, Gargi Dargan
possesses an adequate knowledge of German language. She also volunteers at Max Mueller Bhavan,
New Delhi. She is always keen to work in every sector wherein she could improve her language skills.
From being Freelancer at and doing Internships at Internshala and proz.com where she does
Translation and Interpretation, she inculcates the confidence to present herself forth. Not just is
she confined to the academic stuff but she seeks opportunities to explore the world. She has been to
Germany through a full scholarship at University of Applied Sciences where she was awarded B2-C1
language certificate.
She is eager to work with Modlingua as this platform would work as a catalyst to her work wherein
she can acquire the knowledge in every sphere which would eventually enhance her skills as an
Interpreter. Modlingua provides her with the exposure to diversify her talents and she would
embrace every sort of task given to her.
Career Goals
I will be completing my Bachelors in May this year and I plan to join Jawaharlal Nehru University for
my masters. I had the affinity for the language right from my school days.The impeccable stuff of
Grammar along with its uniqueness, I considered German as an interesting call.I had been to
Germany last year through a scholarship.I was being awarded a full scholarship at The International
University of Applied Sciences, Hessen. My encounter with the people over there held me high and I
actually acquired more confidence and had an experience of the beautiful country and passionate
folks. I believe I actually implemented my theoretical stuff into practice thereby enhancing my
language skills. I am a kind of person who enjoys living in the box of different alphabets. I will start
working on Arabic as well. Totally different languages and scripts boomed out my interest.
After doing my specialisation in translation and interpretation in the same, I see myself as a
conference simultaneous Interpreter in the government sector. It has always been a challenging
errand. In India, there are just 5 Simultaneous Interpreters and I would like to be the next one.
Rigorous practice, patience and the knowledge of the multiple streams and profession is a huge
inevitability. Modlingua provides me with the same opportunity that would correlate to my future
profession. It will be like a catalyst to my efforts.
Apart from the studies, I like to travel and possess a tremendous amount of interest in dance.I have
been actively taking part in the internship and have put forth my efforts in an NGO. Presently I am
working as an intern at URBAN CAMPUS.
Improved version
((HAVING PURSUED B.A.HONS.GERMAN FROM GRS(DEPARTMENT OF GERMANIC AND ROMANCE
STUDIES)AND GOING TO JNU(JAWAHARLAL UNIVERSITY)FOR THE MASTERS)),Gargi Dargan
possesses an adequate knowledge of German language. She also volunteers at Max Mueller Bhavan,
New Delhi. She is always keen to work in every sector wherein she could improve her language skills.
((SHE INCULCATES THE CONFIDENCE TO PRESENT HERSELF FORTH AS SHE HAS BEEN DOING
FREELANCING ON INTERNSHALA AND PROZ.COM)).Not just is she confined to the academic
((INFORMATION ))but she seeks opportunities to explore the world. She has been to Germany
through a full scholarship at University of Applied Sciences where she was awarded B2-C1 language
certificate.
She is eager to work with Modlingua as this platform would work as a catalyst to her work wherein
she ((COULD)) acquire the knowledge in every sphere which would eventually enhance her skills as
an Interpreter. Modlingua provides her with the exposure to diversify her talents and((THEREFORE))
she would embrace every sort of task given to her.
Career Goals

I will be completing my Bachelors in May this year and I plan to join Jawaharlal Nehru University for
my masters. I had the affinity for the language right from my school days.((BECAUSE OF))The
impeccable stuff of Grammar along with its uniqueness, I considered German as an interesting call.I
had been to Germany last year through a scholarship.I was being awarded a full scholarship at The
International University of Applied Sciences, Hessen. My encounter with the people over there held
me high and I actually acquired more confidence and had an experience of the beautiful country and
passionate folks. I believe((,)) I actually implemented my theoretical stuff into practice thereby
enhancing my language skills. I am a kind of person who enjoys living in the box of different
alphabets. I will start working on Arabic as well. Totally different languages and scripts boomed out
my interest.
After doing my specialisation in translation and interpretation in the same, I see myself as a
conference simultaneous Interpreter in the government sector. It has always been a challenging
errand. In India, there are ((ONLY)) 5 Simultaneous Interpreters and I would like to be the next one.
Rigorous practice, patience and the knowledge of the multiple streams and profession is a huge
((NECESSITY)). Modlingua provides me with the same opportunity that would correlate to my future
profession. It will be like a catalyst to my efforts.
Apart from the studies, I like to travel and possess a tremendous amount of interest in dance.I have
been actively taking part in the internship and have put forth my efforts in an NGO. Presently I am
working as an intern at URBAN CAMPUS.

ERROR ANALYSIS
ERRORS RELATED TO ARTICLES=1
ERRORS RELATED TO PUNCTUATIONS,=1
SYMBOLS ,SIGNS,SPACES
CHOICE OF WORDS=3
GRAMMATICAL ERRORS=3
AN EYE OF DETAIL=PROPERLY MENTIONED
ADDITIONAL COMMENTS=APART FROM ABOVE MENTIONED ERRORS ,SENTENCE TRANSFORMATION
WAS BEING DONE.
OVERALL TIME TAKEN=35 MINUTES.