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I am Neha Bhavsar, pursuing Spanish (Hons.) I am Neha Bhavsar, pursuing Spanish (Hons.)
from Delhi University as my graduation course from Delhi University as my graduation course
and planning to do masters in the same. and planning to do masters in the same.
I am a hardworking and dedicated student who I am a hardworking and dedicated student who
likes to learn and explore new things and work likes to learn and explore new things. I believe Not needed
with new people. I believe my varied my varied experiences and the ability to work Double spacing corrected
experiences and the ability to work comfortably comfortably in a team and leading too are my
in a team and leading too are my biggest strength. biggest strength.
I came from commerce background, I hope it I came from commerce background, I hope it
could help me in carrying out this internship could help me in carrying out this internship
successfully. Besides reading History and successfully. Besides reading History and
Literature of Spain and Latin America, Literature of Spain and Latin America,
I take a keen interest in translation. I take keen interest in translation. Omission of an article
To polish the skills I look forward to To polish the skills, I look forward to Comma needed
being a part of Modlingua. If given an be a part of Modlingua. If given an Being replaces by be
opportunity by Modlingua to be in their opportunity by Modlingua to be in their
internship program, I assure in words and internship program, I assure that I Improvement in syntax
prone in action that I would definitely would definitely be an asset to your and sentence structure
be an asset to your organisation and would organization.
learn a great deal along with gardening more
feathers to my hat of knowledge.
“Leadership and learning are indispensable “Leadership and learning are indispensable
to each other” to each other”
Language is the roadmap of a culture. To learn Language is the roadmap of a culture.
Another language is much more than learning it, Deleted Not needed
understanding it and using it as a medium to
know about its inception, the culture of the
people! To have another language is to To have another language is to possess
possess a second soul! It’s completely a new a second soul. It’s completely a new perspective Full stop instead of
perspective to think about the same things to think about the same things differently. exclamatory mark
differently! Having a strong opinion on my Having a strong opinion on my aspirations,
aspirations, I certainly never want to limit I certainly never want to limit myself to my career
myself to my career goals. Restraining myself goals as it will constrain me from exploring Improvement of
on one definite ambition will constrain me for other opportunities. syntax
exploring other opportunities. But since I am But since I am pursuing honors in Spanish
pursuing honours in Spanish from prestigious from prestigious Delhi University (Department of Spelling error
Delhi University (Department of Germanic Germanic and Romance Studies), I am confident
and Romance Studies). I am confident about about my future in the arena of exploration of the Comma instead of
my future in the arena of exploration of the languages and the project related. a full stop
languages and the projects related.
During the course of three years of doing During the course of three years of doing
B.A (Hons.)in Spanish, I have been and still Spanish Honors, I have been and still is Improvement of syntax
is an avid learner and doer. Having a keen an avid learner and doer.
interest acclaimed by securing good Deleted Not needed
grades, I have learnt to speak, read and
write the Spanish language placidly. I have I have a minor graduation in Portuguese
a minor graduation in Portuguese (Beginner’s level). Again not restraining
(Beginner’s level). Again not restraining myself to just the academic pursuit,
myself to just the academic pursuit, I have attended various seminars and
I have attended various seminars and a certified short time course in
a certified short time course in Travel and Tourism. Travel and Tourism.
I have been very active and enthusiastic in I have been very active and enthusiastic in
co-curricular activities since the very beginning co-curricular activities since the very beginning
of the school. I was never behind in taking of the school. I was never behind in taking
initiative, presenting ideas and considering the initiative, presenting ideas and considering the
opinions of everyone and work as one. opinions of everyone and work as one.
Taking consideration of the ideas of the team Taking consideration of the ideas of the team
members and moulding them for an members and moulding them for an excellent
excellent output, has always been my core output has always been my core strength Omission of a comma
strength virtue. Also, I have substantial virtue. Also, I have substantial knowledge
knowledge regarding the market orientation regarding the market orientation and the
and the commerce required for it as I had commerce knowledge required for it. Repetition
commerce strength which made me Deleted
financially sound at least at a beginner
level. Since Modlingua’s internship provides Since Modlingua’s internship provides a
a great opportunity which is specifically on great opportunity which is specifically on
the agenda of ‘teamwork’, my previous experience the agenda of ‘teamwork’, my previous Plural reference
and capabilities will be polished and furthermore, experiences and capabilities will be polished
a different and enriching learning process and furthermore, a different and enriching
will make me go closer to my future aspirations. learning process will make me go closer to my
future aspirations.
I believe my diversified experiences and the ability Deleted Same points being repeated
to work comfortably in a team and leading too
are my biggest strength. If given an opportunity
by Modlingua to be in their internship program,
I assure in words and prone in action that I would
definitely be an asset to your organisation and
would learn a great deal along with gardening
more feathers to my hat of knowledge.
I am Neha Bhavsar, pursuing Spanish (Hons.) I am Neha Bhavsar, pursuing Spanish (Hons.)
from Delhi University as my graduation course from Delhi University as my graduation course
and planning to do masters in the same. and planning to do masters in the same.
I am a hardworking and dedicated student who I am a hardworking and dedicated student who
likes to learn and explore new things and work likes to learn and explore new things. I believe Not needed
with new people. I believe my varied my varied experiences and the ability to work Double spacing corrected
experiences and the ability to work comfortably comfortably in a team and leading too are my
in a team and leading too are my biggest strength. biggest strength.
I came from commerce background, I hope it I came from commerce background, I hope it
could help me in carrying out this internship could help me in carrying out this internship
successfully. Besides reading History and successfully. Besides reading History and
Literature of Spain and Latin America, Literature of Spain and Latin America,
I take a keen interest in translation. I take keen interest in translation. Omission of an article
To polish the skills I look forward to To polish the skills, I look forward to Comma needed
being a part of Modlingua. If given an be a part of Modlingua. If given an Being replaces by be
opportunity by Modlingua to be in their opportunity by Modlingua to be in their
internship program, I assure in words and internship program, I assure that I Improvement in syntax
prone in action that I would definitely would definitely be an asset to your and sentence structure
be an asset to your organisation and would organization.
learn a great deal along with gardening more
feathers to my hat of knowledge.
“Leadership and learning are indispensable “Leadership and learning are indispensable
to each other” to each other”
Language is the roadmap of a culture. To learn Language is the roadmap of a culture.
Another language is much more than learning it, Deleted Not needed
understanding it and using it as a medium to
know about its inception, the culture of the
people! To have another language is to To have another language is to possess
possess a second soul! It’s completely a new a second soul. It’s completely a new perspective Full stop instead of
perspective to think about the same things to think about the same things differently. exclamatory mark
differently! Having a strong opinion on my Having a strong opinion on my aspirations,
aspirations, I certainly never want to limit I certainly never want to limit myself to my career
myself to my career goals. Restraining myself goals as it will constrain me from exploring Improvement of
on one definite ambition will constrain me for other opportunities. syntax
exploring other opportunities. But since I am But since I am pursuing honors in Spanish
pursuing honours in Spanish from prestigious from prestigious Delhi University (Department of Spelling error
Delhi University (Department of Germanic Germanic and Romance Studies), I am confident
and Romance Studies). I am confident about about my future in the arena of exploration of the Comma instead of
my future in the arena of exploration of the languages and the project related. a full stop
languages and the projects related.
During the course of three years of doing During the course of three years of doing
B.A (Hons.)in Spanish, I have been and still Spanish Honors, I have been and still is Improvement of syntax
is an avid learner and doer. Having a keen an avid learner and doer.
interest acclaimed by securing good Deleted Not needed
grades, I have learnt to speak, read and
write the Spanish language placidly. I have I have a minor graduation in Portuguese
a minor graduation in Portuguese (Beginner’s level). Again not restraining
(Beginner’s level). Again not restraining myself to just the academic pursuit,
myself to just the academic pursuit, I have attended various seminars and
I have attended various seminars and a certified short time course in
a certified short time course in Travel and Tourism. Travel and Tourism.
I have been very active and enthusiastic in I have been very active and enthusiastic in
co-curricular activities since the very beginning co-curricular activities since the very beginning
of the school. I was never behind in taking of the school. I was never behind in taking
initiative, presenting ideas and considering the initiative, presenting ideas and considering the
opinions of everyone and work as one. opinions of everyone and work as one.
Taking consideration of the ideas of the team Taking consideration of the ideas of the team
members and moulding them for an members and moulding them for an excellent
excellent output, has always been my core output has always been my core strength Omission of a comma
strength virtue. Also, I have substantial virtue. Also, I have substantial knowledge
knowledge regarding the market orientation regarding the market orientation and the
and the commerce required for it as I had commerce knowledge required for it. Repetition
commerce strength which made me Deleted
financially sound at least at a beginner
level. Since Modlingua’s internship provides Since Modlingua’s internship provides a
a great opportunity which is specifically on great opportunity which is specifically on
the agenda of ‘teamwork’, my previous experience the agenda of ‘teamwork’, my previous Plural reference
and capabilities will be polished and furthermore, experiences and capabilities will be polished
a different and enriching learning process and furthermore, a different and enriching
will make me go closer to my future aspirations. learning process will make me go closer to my
future aspirations.
I believe my diversified experiences and the ability Deleted Same points being repeated
to work comfortably in a team and leading too
are my biggest strength. If given an opportunity
by Modlingua to be in their internship program,
I assure in words and prone in action that I would
definitely be an asset to your organisation and
would learn a great deal along with gardening
more feathers to my hat of knowledge.
Error Analysis
Total Number of Source Text: 546
Total Number of Target Text: 400
Errors related to articles: 1
Errors related to punctuations, symbols, signs, spaces: 5
Omissions: 1
Spelling errors: 1
Choice of words: 2
Factual errors: 0
Choice of words and overall consistency of those words:
Profile Photo Quality: Clear photo, According to given details
Additional comments if any: Apart from above errors, lots of improvement in the sentence structure and syntax was done
Time taken to correct : 60 minutes
Time taken to prepare this evaluation report: 60 minutes
