ASSIGNMENT – 1
Analysis of errors and omissions in content writing
Analysis of errors and omissions in content writing
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Version 2 (Corrected version) |
Comments/Types of errors |
| Profile | ||
| Hi, I am Ramesh Kumar Singh and I am from Delhi. | Hi, I am Ramesh Kumar Singh and I am from Delhi. | No errors |
| Currently, I am doing service in Indian Air Force. | Currently, I am doing service in Indian Air Force. | No errors |
| As security to the nation is our primary concern but in addition, I perform task of legal aspect and translation work. | As security to the nation is our primary concern but in addition, I perform the task related to the legal domain and its translation. | Sentence correction |
| I have completed MBA in human resource management and LL.B. | I have completed MBA in human resource management and LL.B. | No errors |
| I am also pursuing LL.M from Kurukshetra University. | I am also pursuing LL.M from Kurukshetra University. | No errors |
| I have also undergone certificate in French language and information technology course from Air Force Institute. | I have also undergone certificate in French language and information technology course from Air Force Institute. | No errors |
| Recently, I have completed induction translation training from prestigious Central Translation Bureau, New Delhi. | Recently, I have completed induction translation training from prestigious Central Translation Bureau, New Delhi. | No errors |
| As the Government of India has made policy to use bilingual (Hindi-English) in every law, rule, regulations, orders or instructions for all organization in India. | As the Government of India has made policy to use bilingual (Hindi-English) in every law,rule,regulations, orders or instructions for all organization in India. | Comma correction |
| Therefore, my organization is also giving more thrust to cope up with the policy framed by the Government. | Therefore, my organization is also giving more thrust to cope up with the policy framed by the Government. | No errors |
| Thus my role as a translator becomes responsible and challenging. | Thus my role as a translator becomes responsible and challenging. | No errors |
| So I decided to utilize my time by doing internship at Modlingua. | So I decided to utilize my time by doing internship at Modlingua. | No errors |
| I thought Modlingua will be a good platform for me to brush up my skills and gain some professional knowledge and more exposure. | I thought Modlingua will be a good platform for me to brush up my skills and gain some professional knowledge and more exposure. | No errors |
| I feel, Working as an intern for Modlingua will be a great opportunity for me. | I feel, Working as an intern for Modlingua will be a great opportunity for me. | No errors |
| Talking about my hobbies, so I like to watch movies, to travel unknown places and doing adventures activities. | Talking about my hobbies, so I like to watch movies, to travel unknown places and doing adventures activities. | No errors |
| I also like to explore new things in this world. | I also like to explore new things in this world. |
No errors |
| Career Goal | ||
| I would like to develop my career as a professional in a demanding environment, to efficiently utilize as well as enhance my abilities through challenging jobs, where the results of my hard work and contribution could make an organization dynamic and growing and help me to become a better human being. |
I would like to develop my career as a professional in a demanding environment, to efficiently utilize as well as enhance my abilities through challenging jobs, where the results of my hard work and contribution could make an organization dynamic and growing and help me to become a better human being. |
No errors |
| I have always had a different set of interests ranging from economics to management, to law and to language learning. | I have always had a different set of interests ranging from economics to management, to law and to language learning. | No errors |
| After my higher secondary, I joined service in Indian Air Force which is a well reputed organization. | After my higher secondary, I joined service in Indian Air Force which is a well reputed organization. | No errors |
| This organization provided me ample opportunity to learn new skills as per my interest and to utilize these skills for the betterment and development of the organization. |
This organization provided me ample opportunity to learn new skills as per my interest and to utilize these skills for the betterment and development of the organization. |
No errors |
| After completing my MBA ,LL.B. and LL.M, I decided to learn translation work for the translation of policies, rules, regulations, orders and instructions of the organization which is needed nowadays because of the Government of India policies and therefore, I have undergone translation training from Central Translation Bureau, New Delhi. |
After completing my MBA, LL.B. and LL.M, I decided to learn translation work for the translation of policies, rules, regulations, orders and instructions of the organization which is needed nowadays because of the Government of India policies and therefore, I have undergone translation training from Central Translation Bureau, New Delhi. |
No errors |
| My current goal is to use my all knowledge and skills to build this organization a strongest one, thereby, contribution towards the Nation building. |
My current goal is to use my all knowledge and skills to build this organization a strongest one, thereby contribution towards the Nation building. |
Comma correction |
| To achieve my career goal, the project management training from internship of Modlingua will help immensely. | To achieve my career goal, the project management training from internship of Modlingua will help immensely. | No errors |
| I wish that my career goal of Organizational development for the Nation building will be achieved through this internship. |
I wish that my career goal of Organizational development for the Nation building will be achieved through this internship. |
No errors |
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Error Analysis
Total Number of Source Text: 447Total Number of Target Text: 449 |
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| Errors related to articles | 0 |
| Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces | 4 |
| omissions | 2 |
| Spelling errors | 0 |
| Choice of words | 0 |
| Factual errors | 0 |
| Choice of words and over all consistency of those words | 1 |
| An eye for details | attention for details |
| Page layout and overall presentation | good |
| Profile Photo Quality | Not applicable here |
| Additional comments if any | Apart from above errors, improvement in the sentence structure was done in order to bring more clarity and coherence |
| Time taken to correct 254 words | 25 Minutes |
| Time taken to prepare this evaluation report | 20 Minutes |
