| ERROR ANALYSIS RUBRIC FOR SUMMER INTERNS OF MODLINGUA 2018 | ||
| Brief Profile | ||
| Draft Version | Corrected Version | Comments |
| Hello everyone, My name is Utkarsh Prakash. | My name is Utkarsh Prakash. | No need to add ‘Hello Everyone’. |
| I am from Kanpur and currently staying in Delhi with my elder brother. | I am from Kanpur and currently living in Delhi. | Mentioning of whom I live with is not required here. |
| I completed my education till graduation( B.Sc.) from Kanpur itself. | I pursued my bachelor degree from Kanpur University | Replace ‘Completed’ with pursued and ‘education till graduation’ with my bachelor degree. |
| As long as I can remember language study has always been a part of my life. There has always been a question “What if?” in my mind. What if there was no way to communicate? What if there was just one language that everybody speaks? Linguist is defined as the systematic study of materials and sources to establish communication bond and reach new conclusions. | As long as I remember , the language study has always been the core area of my interest. I always have a question in my mind “What if there was no way to communicate or just one universal language that everyone speaks?” In my words, Linguistics is defined as the systematic study of one culture and its all forms to establish a parallelism with the current languages. | Delete ‘can’. Add ‘, ’ and article the before language. ‘The core area of my interest sounds’ good in place of ‘a part of my life.’ Remove There to ‘I’. Delete “What if?” in second line. Merge second and fourth sentence and changed one language to universal language. Omit Linguist and add linguistics and defined the brief definition of linguistics in my way. |
| Why is language so important to me? Well, it is opening a new road through knowledge. I believe that language is one of the keys to opening the door of medicine itself. It takes your heart and soul to become a good writer. And it takes your understanding ability and immense patience to become a good translator or interpreter. | The reason why language is so important to me is its bridging capability between two different worlds of culture, tradition, and values etc. As It takes your heart and soul to become a good writer. Same as to be a good translator and interpreter, one requires immense patience and dedication. | Add ‘The reason’ before ‘why’ and try to clearly define the importance of language. Delete question marks and merged the second sentence with the first with sentence its bridging capability between two different worlds of culture, tradition, and values etc. Deleted ‘. I believe that language is one of the keys to opening the door of medicine itself’. Deleted ‘I believe that language is one of the keys to opening the door of medicine itself.’ Added As before its. Modifying the last sentence while setting the similarity with the last one is a good approach to understand what takes to become a good translator. |
| I started my career as a translator for an NGO( Gyan Bharti) and gradually I realized that I loved to work as a freelancer. This is because when you work as a freelancer you have the opportunity to learn new things and you are not bound in certain specific areas. But since it's rightly said that Liberty comes with vigilance, so need to be careful with every step that you take. | My journey as a translator started with working for an NGO in 2013 which is ranked among the top 100 working NGO’s in India and I felt a great pleasure in translation. I decided working as a freelance translator, and this meticulous decision gave me opportunity for learning new things on day to day basis. So, the boredom of same regular work never terrified me. |
Changed ‘I started my career’ to ‘My journey’. For an NGO. Added the year, I stepped into translation industry. Replaced ‘This’ is because when you work as a freelancer you have the opportunity to learn new things and you are not bound in certain specific areas. But replace since it's rightly said that Liberty comes with vigilance, so need to be careful with every step that you take’ to I decided working as a freelance translator, and this meticulous decision gave me opportunity for learning new things on day to day basis. So, the boredom of same regular work never terrified me. |
| I have worked with few of the well-known clients so far such as Amway, Crystal translations, Amazon, HBO, Netflix( third party), Xicom etc. |
Translation has given me a golden opportunity to collaborate with Big Brands like Amazon, HBO, Netflix, Microsoft, Amway and others. This opportunity gave me the understanding of their value system and working ethics which I do incorporate in my profession. | Modify the source sentence with effective meaning of my experience. Added importance of working with them in the second line. |
| Myjstrength is my dedication and honesty and my weakness is that I somewhere lack in the skills of marketing and project management. | My key strengths are my honest dedication, quality delivery and time management. But my weaknesses are brand marketing and client handling. | Add key between My and strength and honest word between my weakness, Added quality delivery and time management. In terms of weeknesses, I used brand marketing and client handling. |
| Well if I talk about my hobbies it will be playing badminton, swimming and listening to some good music when I am alone. To conclude I would say I am happy with what I am doing but will be more satisfied if I can bring some more value to it. |
Talking about my hobbies, I love playing badminton, swimming and listening music. As a translator, I would say I am happy with current position and would like to continue explore new domain of translation. |
Omit ‘Well If I talk’ and use Talking. In second sentence deleted Some good music when I am alone. Replaced ‘to conclude’ to ‘As a translator’. Replace but will be more satisfied if I can bring some more value to it into would like to continue exploring new domain of translation. |
| Career Profiles | ||
| Draft Version -1 | Corrected Version -2 | Comments |
| I constantly keep on improving my skills whether it's language or communication with my clients. I am fond of travelling, so I have kept a short-term goal for myself to learn few of the regional languages and then go for the foreign languages. | I constantly keep on improving my skills whether it's language or communication with my clients. I am fond of travelling, so I have kept a short-term goal for myself to learn a few of the regional languages and then go for the foreign languages. | Use ‘a few’ in place of ‘few’. |
| Language localization is different from mere translation since it involves a comprehensive study of the target audience in order to correctly adapt the product to local needs. The localization process is most generally related to the cultural adaptation and translation of software, video games and websites, as well as audio, video or other multimedia content, and less frequently to any written translation. | Language localization is different from mere translation since it involves a comprehensive study of the target audience in order to correctly adapt the product to local needs. The localization process is most generally related to the cultural adaptation and translation of software, video games and websites, as well as audio, video or other multimedia content, and less frequently to any written translation. | No correction needed. |
| Almost all the major economies in the world have set their quality standards and all professional translators have to follow them, otherwise, their works are rejected. This also helps them to increase and improvise their language skills and so that their work can be later read by the people across the world. In India, we lack such kind of awareness and training. So many language experts with significant potential are not able to excel. They don’t get enough recognition from the world community. A little more of professional training is required to pace up with the global market. Translators and interpreters also have to be given such kind of training. | Almost all the major economies in the world have set their quality standards and all professional translators have to follow them, otherwise, their translation works are rejected or they are penalized. This also helps them to increase and improvise their language skills and so that their work can become the model for others. In India, we lack such kind of awareness and training. So many language experts with significant potential are not able to excel and they don’t get enough recognition from the world community. A little more of professional training is required to pace up with the global market. Translators and interpreters also have to be given such kind of training. | Adding the penalization information of wrong translation. Use their work can become the model for others. with work can be later read by the people across the world. Delete . and add the second sentence. |
| I got myself enrolled with modlingua internship program after listening to the vision of Mr Ravi Kumar who rightly said that the translators in India are not less talented but they just lack in organizing their skills to obtain maximum benefit out of them. | I got myself enrolled with modlingua internship program after listening to the vision of Mr. Ravi Kumar who rightly said that the translators in India are not less talented but they just lack in organizing their skills to obtain maximum benefit out of them. | No correction needed. |
| Under this program, I am looking forward to learning the basics of translation since I am not a trained translator and also would know how can I create a better market for selling my services. We can get the best price for our services only when we can ensure that it has adhered the quality standards, the management guidelines and the sales criteria. | Pursuing this internship, I am looking forward to learning the basics of translation. And I also want to learn the know how of establishing my presence better in this growing field. We can get the best price for our services only if we can ensure that it has adhered the quality standards, the project guidelines and the ethics criteria of the source file. | Change ‘pursuing’ this internship. “Delete Since a I am am not a trained translator’ Changed and also would know how can I create a better market for selling my services to “And I also want to learn the know how of establishing my presence better in this growing field.” Deleted When and used If. Use project guidelines instead of management guidelines and Use ethics criteria of source file to scale criteria. |
| I am also looking forward to working with modlingua in future as a translator and interpreter. | With this, I also wish to work with Modlingua as a translator and interpreter in near future. | Modify the last sentence to make my future prospects clear with Modlingua. |
| Error Analysis Total Number of Source Text: 662 Total Number of Target Text: 646 |
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| Errors related to articles | 0 |
| Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces | 1 |
| Omissions | 9 |
| Spelling errors | 0 |
| Choice of words | 6 |
| Factual errors | 5 |
| Choice of words and over all consistency of those words | 10 |
| An eye for details | Lacked attention for details |
| Page layout and overall presentation | Missing |
| Profile Photo Quality | Not applicable here |
| Additional comments if any | Apart from above errors, lots of improvement in the sentence structure was done in order to bring more clarity and coherence |
| Time taken to correct 662 words | 45 Minutes |
| Time taken to prepare this evaluation report | 15 Minutes |
