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Assignment 1– Anjali Jain

 

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I have been a nomad, not in the literal sense of the word, but in that I’m always seeking answers to questions of life. I did my Bachelors and Masters in Translation in the German language from Jawaharlal Nehru University. Back in 2012 when I started pursuing German in my Bachelors I honestly had no idea what I wanted out of life. In the process, however, I developed as person and crafted a bouquet of experiences that I can fall back on. Such experiences have led me to the path of uncovering my true self. I have been a nomad, not in the literal sense of the word, but in that, I’m always seeking answers to questions of life. I did my Bachelors and Masters in Translation in the German language from Jawaharlal Nehru University. Back in 2012 when I started pursuing German in my Bachelors I honestly had no idea what I wanted out of life. In the process, however, I developed as a person and crafted a bouquet of experiences that I can fall back on. Such experiences have led me to the path of uncovering my true self. Insertion of article before definite pronoun German

indefinite article a  is inserted before person 

Career Goals 

Recently I stumbled upon the Japanese word Ikigai which means your sense of being and in Japanese culture there is this notion that one constantly creates one’s Ikigai. I also feel that you cannot have one set goal for life but that you constantly develop yourself, however, you must have a plan or what is it that drives you out of bed in the morning like spiritual teacher Rob Bell explains.  Recently I stumbled upon the Japanese word Ikigai which means your sense of being and in Japanese culture, there is this notion that one constantly creates one’s Ikigai. I also feel that you cannot have one set goal for life but that you constantly develop yourself, however, you must have a plan or what is it that drives you out of bed in the morning like spiritual teacher Rob Bell explains. Comma missing after however;

Didn’t pay attention to the form of tense in drives
Following this principle, I’m currently preparing for C2 level exam of the German language. Apart from making me multilingual, learning German has helped me appreciate languages better and made me conscious of the working of languages. As children, we hardly pay attention to the process of language learning. Following this principle, I’m currently preparing for the C2 level exam of the German language. Apart from making me multilingual, learning German has helped me appreciate languages better and made me conscious of the working of languages. As children, we hardly pay attention to the process of language learning Article missing before German language;

The first letter should be capitalised in German language, definite pronoun;

Comma inserted after multilingual to reflect the pause in writing;  
But doing so when you are adult takes you back to the basics and makes you realise how beautiful each phase of mastering a language is. I remember when in 2016 I got a chance to visit Berlin on a scholarship, the joy of speaking in the language of the country one visits. It was then I also realised the feeling of speaking in your mother tongue. These qualities and associations that separate one language from another is what makes the process of language learning more remarkable. But doing so when you are adult takes you back to the basics and makes you realise how beautiful each phase of mastering a language is. I remember when in 2016 I got a chance to visit Berlin on a scholarship, the joy of speaking in the language of the country one visits. It was then I also realised the feeling of speaking in your mother tongue. These qualities and associations that separate one language from another is what makes the process of language learning more remarkable. 
I would like to learn Japanese some time in future and develop a similar bonding with the language. No matter what one studies or does, our ultimate goal is to become a part productive member of society. At this juncture I would call this as my long term goal and this internship will add one more feather in my cap. I would like to learn Japanese sometime in future and develop a similar bonding with the language. No matter what one studies or does, our ultimate goal is to become a part productive member of society. At this juncture, I would call this as my long-term goal and this internship will add one more feather in my cap. Misspelled sometime

The word part makes the meaning unclear

Comma inserted  after juncture
An internship in the field of marketing related aspects would enable me to not only translate but also promote my own blogs in future. With the help of the confidence which I will gain after working with a set of established professionals, I would also like to be on your file as one of the Modlingua German Language Translators. 
 An internship in the field of marketing related aspects would enable me to not only translate but also promote my own blogs in future. With the help of the confidence which I will gain after working with a set of established professionals, I would also like to be on your file as one of the Modlingua German Language Translators. These lines make another complete paragraph.

Your makes the meaning unclear
              
       
Error Analysis
Number of Words in Version 1-
422
Number of Words in Corrected Version-422
Error related to article 3                                              
Error related to punctuation, symbols, signs,  spaces 5
Spelling errors 1
Omissions 0
Factual errors  0
Choice of words 2
Overall consistency of the article  1
An eye for detail Lacked attention for common errors like punctuation, articles
Total time taken to prepare the report and check errors  More than an hour
Profile Photo Quality Not applicable here 

              
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Assignment 1 Kareena

ERROR ANALYSIS RUBRIC FOR SUMMER INTERNS OF MODLINGUA 2018
 

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I am Kareena Kapoor. As an undergraduate student, I am pursuing second year of B.A(Hons.) in French Language from Department of Germanic and Romance Studies, Delhi University. I have developed strong written as well as oral skills in English and French. As a foreign language student my focus is to improve my analytical, business, communication, marketable skills in the global economy. I am Kareena Kapoor, pursuing second year of B.A. (Hons.) in French language from the Department of Germanic and Romance Studies, Delhi University. I have developed a strong written as well as oral skill in English and French. As a foreign language student, my focus is to improve my analytical, business, communication and marketable skills in the global economy. Repetition of phrase, put space after B.A., wrong quantity of noun, omission of punctuation, omission of conjunction "and"
According to me, the study of foreign languages teaches us to respect the other people. It fosters an understanding of the interrelation of language and human nature. According to me, the study of foreign languages teaches us to respect other people. It fosters an understanding of the inter-relation of language and human nature. Omission of an article "the", adding hyphen "-"
I regularly assess my speaking skills through online activities provided by BBC. I am a great fan of Jules Verne. I read his lot of books. Recently I am reading (Deux ans de vacances). I love to listen and sing French music and I read many newspapers of French to expand my vocabulary. I practice all this so that I can put my knowledge into practice like in Branding, Market Research, Sales etc. I regularly assess my speaking skill through online activities provided by BBC. A lot of Jules Verne’s books fascinates me, recently I am reading “Deux ans de vacances.” My hobbies include singing French songs and reading French newspapers to expand my vocabulary so I can put in application my knowledge into practice like in Branding, Market Research, Sales, etc. Wrong quantity of "skills", Improvement in syntax, adding a comma before "etc", Changing of brackets into double apostrophes.
I have a keen interest in yoga and contemporary dance. I have attained many felicitations for the same. I have a keen interest in yoga and contemporary dance, these permit me to gain many felicitations for the same. Improvement in sentence
I want to do internship in Modlingua to adapt myself in corporate world and it will give me an opportunity to meet different managers, with diverse leadership styles. Having an internship will definitely be something that will transform my life and give me a new perspective. I want to be a part of this reputed firm and utilize my skills for growth of this firm My interest in doing the internship in Modlingua would make me more apt to adapt myself in corporate world and it will give me an opportunity to meet different managers with diverse leadership styles. Having an internship will definitely be something that will transform my life and give me a new perspective in thinking. I want to be a part of this reputed firm and utilize my skills for the growth of this firm. Adding more appropriate words, addition of an article "the", missing full stop at the end of the sentence.
Since childhood, I have a great interest in learning new languages but French appealed to me the most. I am studying French since 8 years and from that moment I just knew what I wanted to do with my life, and now I am pursuing it. I was greaty influenced by the French culture which has contributed to the world like democracy, human rights. Someone said me that (One language sets you in a corridor for life but Two languages open every door along the way) from that day my interest in French grew a lot. I was the first prize winner in French quiz competition in 2012, this victory boosted my confidence so I participated in each and every competition of my school to widen my experience and knowledge. Since childhood, I have a great interest in learning new languages but French appealed to me the most. I have been studying French for 8 years and from that moment I just knew what I wanted to do with my life. I was greatly influenced by the French culture which has contributed to the world like democracy and human rights. Someone told me that “One language sets you in a corridor for life but Two languages open every door along the way”, from that day my interest in French grew a lot. I was the first prize winner in French quiz competition in 2012, this victory boosted my confidence so I participated in each and every competition of my school to widen my experience and knowledge. Change of tenses in "I am" into "I have been", Change since into for, omission of unnecessary sentence, fixed typo in "greaty", put a conjunction "and", quotes fixed not in brackets, adding a comma after quote.
After finishing class 12th, Treading towards my ambition, I decided to do Bachelors in French language from Department of Germanic and Romance studies to see the different aspects of it. My professors encouraged me a lot. I participated in a French creative writing competition in which I got third prize, then next year I participated at Francophone quiz competition in which I got second prize. These victories incite me to work more hard towards my studies. After finishing class 12th, treading towards my ambition, I decided to do my BA in this field to see the different aspects of it. My professors encouraged me a lot. I participated in a French creative writing competition in which I got the third prize, then next year I participated at Francophone quiz competition in which I got the second prize. These victories incite me to work harder towards my studies. Fixed capital letter in "Treading" into normal letter after comma, rephrasing unnecessary sentence, adding the before prize changing "more hard" into "harder".
My second goal, is to become a good translator. I want to get a Multicultural Experience, Being a translator means I’ll be a person who straddles with multiple worlds. That’s going to put me in touch with people from all over the world like learning about different ways of life, perhaps trying new foods, and experiencing the nuances of culture that people who simply travel to other countries don’t always get. In short, I want to be a cultural ambassador. My second goal, is to become a good translator. I want to get a multicultural experience and being a translator means I will be a person who straddles with multiple worlds. That is going to put me in touch with people from all over the world, like learning about different ways of life, perhaps trying new foods, and experiencing the nuances of culture in which people who simply travel to other countries do not always get. In short, I want to be a cultural ambassador. Capital letter fixed "multicultural experience", "being", omission of abbreviations in "I'll, That's, don't", put a punctuation after world, changing of "that" into "in which".
Being passionate about social work, I want to be a successful naturopathy doctor. In today’s world we all are living on artificial food (Junk Food) Several research studies have shown that fast foods cause memory and learning process, With so many of daily calories eaten at work can effect the productivity. So, I want to cure people with Naturopathy, which is a distinct type of primary care medicine that blends age-old healing traditions like office yoga , water and nutrition with scientific advances and current research. It was used widely in ancient cultures, including Egypt, Persia, China, India, and Israel, before it was well established as the traditional European water cure. Being passionate about social work motivates me to be a successful naturopathy doctor. In today’s world we all are living on artificial food (Junk Food). Several research studies have shown that fast food degrades memory and learning process, with so many of daily calories eaten at work can affect the productivity. So, I want to cure people with naturopathy. Rephrasing the sentence, putting a full stop after a sentence in "Junk Food", changing the word "cause" into "degrades", capital letter fixed in "With". Wrong verb fixed in "effect" into "affect", common noun fixed in "Naturopathy", omission of unnecessary details.
Error Analysis
Total Number of Source Text: 792
Total Number of Target Text: 728
Errors related to articles 0
Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces 20
Omissions 7
Spelling errors 1
Choice of words 7
Factual errors 0
Choice of words and overall consistency of those words 0
An eye for details Lacked attention for details
Page layout and overall presentation Missing
Profile Photo Quality Not applicable here.
Profile picture is not at 250x 250 pixel size.
Additional comments if any Apart from above errors, lots of improvement in the sentence structure was done in order to bring more clarity and coherence.
Time taken to correct 792 words:  30 Minutes
Time taken to prepare this evaluation report:  50 Minutes
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