| ERROR ANALYSIS RUBRIC FOR SUMMER INTERNS OF MODLINGUA 2018 | ||
| Version 1 - Draft version | Version 2 - Corrected version | Comments / Types of errors |
| Brief profile | ||
| I am from Rome and I am a newbie in the industry of Translation. | Born and raised in Rome, I am a newbie in the industry of Translation. | Improvement in sentence structure. |
| […] gave me a well-rounded understanding of the cultures of the languages I chose to study. | [...] gave me a well-rounded understanding of the cultures tied to the languages I chose to study. | Improvement in sentence structure. |
| I decided to continue my career path in the field of Translation rather than Interpreting | I decided to continue my career path in the Translation field instead of Interpreting | Improvement in sentence structure and better words choice. |
| Moreover, I developed a strong interest in Fashion, and as a consequence a deep knowledge of fashion, clothing and textiles vocabulary. | Moreover, I developed a strong interest in Fashion, and as a consequence a deep knowledge of clothing and textiles vocabulary. | The second 'fashion' is redundant, deleted. |
| Last September I got a grant to attend the School of Advanced Technologies for Translators in Trento, the core of Italian academic research in the subfield of Translation Technology. | Last September I got a grant to attend the "School of Advanced Technologies for Translators" in Trento, core of Italian academic research in the subfield of Translation Technology. | Inverted commas needed; 'the' before 'core' deleted. |
| Career goals | ||
| “World travel worlds. Translators do the driving” is what the Italian translator, Anna Rusconi, said about this fantastic job. | “Words travel worlds. Translators do the driving”. This is what the Italian translator Anna Rusconi said about our fantastic job. | Typo in the quotation: 'world' mistyped for 'words'. Commas used to create the aside have been deleted and the entire sentence has been splitted in two to improve fluency. 'this' replaced with an inclusive 'our'. |
| I remember dreaming of being an Egyptologist to decipher hieroglyphics and translating them into Italian. | I remember dreaming of being an Egyptologist to decipher hieroglyphics and pretending to translate them into a strange Italian. | 'pretending to' and the adjective 'strange' have been added to stress the idea of a childish activity. |
| English and French in middle school, French and German in high school and I added Russian at University. | First English and French, then I added German in high school and Russian at University. | Improvement in syntax and sentence structure. |
| [...] guaranteeing a high level of quality in a highly technological translation environment. | [...] guaranteeing high quality standards in a cutting-edge technological environment. | Repetition ('high') deleted and better words choice. |
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Error Analysis
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| Total Number of Source Text: 592 | ||
| Total Number of Target Text: 608 | ||
| Errors related to articles | 1 | |
| Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces | 1 | |
| Omissions | 0 | |
| Deletions (added category) | 3 | |
| Spelling errors | 1 | |
| Choice of words | 7 | |
| Factual errors | 0 | |
| Choice of words and overall consistency of those words | 7 | |
| An eye for details | Lacked attention for details | |
| Page layout and overall presentation | Missing | |
| Profile Photo Quality | A profile picture of 250x250 pixel size was required. I submitted a photo of 299x394. I had to edit it with Paint and in a couple of minutes I would have had the required size. | |
| Additional comments if any | Lots of improvement in the sentence structure was done in order to bring more clarity and coherence to text. | |
| Time taken to correct 592 words: | 15 Minutes | |
| Time taken to prepare this evaluation report: | 30 Minutes | |
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Assignment 01_Tiziana Paloni
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