​NIDHI JOSHI – Assignment 1   Profile Version 1 – Draft Version    Version 2 – Corrected Version Comments/ Types of Errors Currently I am pursuing my bachelor studies in Spanish Language Literature and Culture. Currently, I am pursuing my bachelor studies in Spanish Language Literature and Culture. Comma needed after Currently Career Goals Version 1 – Draft Version  Version 2 – Corrected Version Comments/ Types of Errors Coming from a social science background, the social aspect of the language enthralls me. Coming from a social science background, the social aspect of the language enthrals me. Spelling of “enthrall” Enthrall British English spelling Enthral American English spelling   Collaborating with other parts of the world resulting the development of both sides. Collaborating with other parts of the world resulting in the development of both sides. Sentence structure error.   I look forward to be the connecting factor and bring the world closer I look forward to being the connecting factor and bring the world closer Grammar error I am extremely excited and honored to be a part of the Modlingua I am extremely excited and honoured to be a part of the Modlingua Spelling of “honored” Honored – American English Honoured – British English ERROR ANALYSIS Total Number of Source Text: 372 Total Number of Target Text: 05 Errors related to articles: 0   Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces: 1 Omissions: 1 Spelling errors: 2 Choice of words: 1 Factual errors: 0 Choice of words and overall consistency of those words: Good  An eye for details: Satisfactory. Can do better.  Page layout and overall presentation: Good  Profile Photo Quality 250* 187 pixels Time taken to correct 372 words: 25 minutes Time taken to prepare this evaluation report: 30 minutes

ERROR ANALYSIS: CAREER GOALS ESSAY

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I participated in a number of cultural competitions for a student’s organization called UBES, which promotes students’ involvement with cultural activities and provides an environment in which one can put certain skills into practice.	I participated in a number of cultural competitions for a student’s organization called UBES, which promotes students’ involvement with cultural activities and provides an environment in which an individual can put certain skills into practice.	Accuracy. The pronoun one is too vague to be used in an academic essay.
Also, I participated in the Student Union as Press Secretary for two years and as a Secretary-General during my senior year.	Also, I participated in the Student Union as Press Secretary for two years and as Secretary-General during my senior year.	No article needed.
In my job as Press Secretary, I was in charge of informing through social media and other mediums available within the institution our proposals, projects carried out and achievements gained throughout the school year and the organization of certain events.	In my job as Press Secretary, I was in charge of informing our proposals, projects carried out and achievements gained throughout the school year and the organization of certain events, through social media and other mediums available within the institution.	Syntax, word order.
Also, as a Secretary-General, I was the president and vice-president’s right hand and because of my great skills for communication and interpersonal relationships I acted as the bridge between the students and the principal.	Also, as Secretary-General, I was the president and vice-president’s right hand and because of my great skills for communication and interpersonal relationships I acted as the bridge between the students and the principal.	No article needed.
This allowed me to develop even more my communication skills and to grow a capacity for empathy.	This allowed me to develop my communication skills even more and to grow a capacity for empathy	Word order; syntax.
…when I graduated from high school, I was chosen valedictorian based on not only academic, but also humanitarian performance.	…when I graduated from high school, I was chosen valedictorian based not only on academic, but also on humanitarian performance.	Wrong use of the preposition; article omitted.
I believe that in order to be a good translator having knowledge of the languages is not enough, culture is almost as important.	I believe that in order to be a good translator, having knowledge of the languages is not enough, as culture is almost as important.	Punctuation (there should be a comma after translation because of the use of the following construction: in order to be a good translator, …) and in the first draft the connector “as” is missing.
Besides Spanish and English, I will to study French so as to acquire a language C and be able to become a translator and interpreter of the United Nations.	Besides Spanish and English, I will study French so as to acquire a language C and be able to become a translator and interpreter of the United Nations.	Unnecessary addition.

 

Error Analysis Total Number of Source Text: 865 Total Number of Target Text: 865
Errors related to articles: 2
Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces: 1
Omissions: 1
Spelling errors: 0
Choice of words: 1
Factual errors: 0
Choice of words and overall consistency of those words: above average
An eye for details: above average
Page layout and overall presentation: average
Profile Photo Quality: at first, I submitted a photo with the wrong size, but I sent the right one as soon as I realized.
Additional comments if any: there were no major errors in the essay, but grammar mistakes were spotted.
Time taken to correct 865 words: 10 minutes.
Time taken to prepare this evaluation report: 15 minutes.

ERROR ANALYSIS: PROFESSIONAL PROFILE

Version 1 – Draft version	Version 2 – Corrected version	Comments/Types of errors
I am Virginia L. Rodriguez, I am from Argentina and I am studying to become a Public Translator of English in School of Languages, National University of Córdoba.	I am Virginia L. Rodriguez, I am from Argentina and I am majoring in English Translation in School of Languages, National University of Córdoba	Register; choice of words.
During my free time, I like reading, playing tennis and traveling as much as I can, as for me it is the best way to learn about other cultures.	During my free time, I like reading, playing tennis, and traveling as much as I can, as for me it is the best way to learn about other cultures.	Punctuation.

 

Error Analysis Total Number of Source Text: 180 Total Number of Target Text: 176
Errors related to articles: 0
Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces: 1
Omissions: 0
Spelling errors: 0
Choice of words: 1
Factual errors: 0
Choice of words and overall consistency of those words: above average
An eye for details: above average
Page layout and overall presentation: average
Profile Photo Quality: at first, I submitted a photo with the wrong size, but I sent the right one as soon as I realized.
Additional comments if any: no major errors were found.
Time taken to correct 180 words: 5 minutes.
Time taken to prepare this evaluation report: 10 minutes.